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Offline Ponikvar

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My CCA app, Tell me how i did.
« on: August 21, 2011, 11:14:56 PM »
Well i have two weeks to work on this, just tell me what you thinkg and any help you might have to help me pass this time.

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OOC Name: Ponikvar

IC Character Name: Siera Ponikvar

1) Please write a minimum of 3 paragraphs OOC'ly detailing why your character wishes to join the Combine Civil Authority and what lead your character to do so.
   It all started when Siera was in Japan, When the portal storms started she was always in a trance that made her believe that nothing that was happening was real. Her family’s butler took her to city 18 where the people had gathered to stay safe and go on with their normal lives. Siera never did go back to her normal life nor could she ever for her father was killed by hostile alien life forms that came through the rifts and she would never be able to go back home. But her father’s unknown death will only be the start of it all.
   Her family’s butler had stayed by Siera's side the whole time but that would have to come to an end at some point. One morning he went out go restock their food but luck would have it that the 7 hour war started very soon after he left. Siera had awaken that morning to find that the butler was gone, so still in her weird trance she went looking for him. When Siera stumbled out into the streets she could see destruction and chaos as the Combine invaded, though she could not comprehend what was going on because of her trance.
   There was one thing that broke Siera out of her trance, and that was the sights of the butler's body, laying in a pool of blood,  shot dead. At that moment Siera knew that she had to run and stay alive, so she stared to run. She ran all the way to the other end of the city before she blacked out, when she started to come back she realized she wasn’t in the spot she blacked out. Siera is in what she thinks is a lobby of a hotel and a lone T.V. is on showing Wallace Breen surrender Earth to the Combine. Some time later Siera finds herself in the train station of city 18 in a line of people being handed their city 18 jumpsuits by the combine. The very second she saw the combine she though she found a way to stay alive. That way was to join the combine and rise through the ranks.

2) Please detail your characters traits. (Eg, Pure, Lawful, Trustworthy)
Cold
Dedicated


3) Please provide 2 paragraphs about what you are expecting the Combine Civil Authority to be like for you and your character?
OOC: I expect that joining the Combine will give me a new and more difficult way to role play. I’m sure it will take a good amount of time and dedication but I'm willing to put in that time and dedication because i think its worth it. When i play as a Civil protection unit I'm sure I'm going to learn many new things in role playing and even increase how well i can role play. This is what i will expect from joining the Combine Civil Authority.
IC: I’m sure that joining the Combine Civil Authority will not be easy. As a girl who never had to do much for herself i will have to learn how to rely on my self and those who out rank me. Also I'm sure the Combine Civil Authority will have a laugh as i struggle with tasks that most others could do but I'm also sure that i will get just as strong as they are. This is what I, Siera Ponikvar, expect from joining the Combine Civil Authority.


4) Please provide a detailed back-story from an out-of-character perspective on your applying character. This section must be detailed and consist of a minimum of 300 words.
   In July,18,1990 Siera Ponikvar was born into a rich American family that lived in Ohio. Her family was the founders of a computer software corporation called Onik and was very well known for their anti virus software and their operating systems. Only a year after Siera was born her mother died in a fatal car crash, and her father was never home for he was always at work, so she would grow up with no parents to but instead she had the family butler. The families butler was a 69 year old Japanese man named Goro Isumoto, and had worked for the Ponikvar family for over 10 years. Goro took it upon himself to help Siera grow up in a world where she would have no parents and he did so like she was his own daughter. When Siera got to her elementary school years she was avoided my all the kids because they didn’t know what to do in front of someone who had a family that was as rich and powerful as hers so she always got the cold shoulder. This lead to Siera becoming a cold and anti social person. With everyone giving her the cold shoulder only the family butler would listen to her and help her, and so he became her only friend. When Siera was 14 she found herself in japan, the year was 2004. Goro found himself taking Siera to the nearest city to protect her from the hostile aliens from Xen that where coming out of the rifts. Siera's father was killed by the aliens when he was out looking for Siera, before the portal storms Siera stayed with Goro and his mother who lived out in the country, at Goros mothers home. Siera, not knowing what city she was in and not knowing any Japanese was going into a sort of trance that made her almost mindless, all she could do was eat, sleep, and when Goro was lucky say a few words. After a few years the year was 2015 and the 7 hour war was about to begin. Goro went out that morning to get Siera a present because it was July 18, her birthday. Siera wakes up that morning hearing a lot of loud noise, she didn’t even bother to think about, but when she noticed that Goro was not in the hotel room she when t out looking for him so he would make her Breakfast. When she got outside she didn’t even seam to notice the people running and screaming, nor did she notice the drop ships and Striders ripping through the Japanese military. But what she did notice is the body of her butler laying out in the streets covered in blood with a small box rapped in paper in his hand. When she came across this sight she snapped out of the trance in seconds and realized that she was in danger and all she could do wad leave her only friend on the streets and live. Siera ran from the fighting all the way to the other side of the city only to find that it to was being destroyed and that is when she fell to the ground blacking out from exhaustion. When she awoke she noticed she was in a lobby with other people all around watching one small T.V. screen. What she heard from the T.V. before blacking out again was Wallace Breen surrender Earth to the Combine. Some time later she found herself in line at a train station in a city that people she didn’t know called City18. This is where she first noticed the Civil Protection, they where handing out City 18 jumpsuits to everyone who was going into the city. At this moment she knew what she had to do to survive and to survive she had to join the new power that controlled earth, The Universal Union. Siera has spent a a year in city 18 working on becoming a loyalist and forgetting Goro and her family by the chemicals that was being fed to her and so many others.


OOC Details

1. How long have you played on role-playing servers in general? About 250 hours out of the 300 hours i have spent on Gmod.

2. How long have you played on serious servers? Just more than a week.

3. How long have you played on Catalyst Gaming? Just more than a week

4. What Time zone are you in? Eastern

5. In what country do you live? America

6. How old are you? 17

7. What’s your most memorable quality RP experience? When i was on the server there was only 4 Civil Protection on and over 10 Citizens, For some reason one of the CP came into the UCH and had one of the other female Civilians wipe dirt off of his boots. But soon after that a mob of people over took the CP unit and killed him and hid his body up stairs in a room. Me, being a loyalist went out to get the other CP units to go and help. What happened was a stand off between two CP units, one was a recruit, and 5 people who also took the dead CP's gun. It came to a stand still though for both sides started blaming each other for powergaming but when it lasted it was the most fun i have had on a role playing server.

8. Do you consider yourself a good listener? Yes, I do consider myself as a good listener.





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IC Section


Full Name: Siera Ponikvar
CID: #22904
Age: 26
Gender: Female
Height: 5'5
Hair Color Light blond
Eye Color: Dark Blue
Sexual Orientation: Strait
Weight: 119 pounds
Mental Distinctions: None
Mental Defects: Social Anxiety
Mental Advantages: Very good Hand Eye Coordination
Notable Qualities: Always tries her best.



1. Have you ever been detained or apprehended for a Sociostability Infringement before? If so, explain? No, I have not.

2. Do you regularly eat Combine Civil Authority Issued Rations? Everyday.

3. Are you willing to give your life to the cause of the Universal Union? Yes, I am

4. Do you as a Citizen and future Civil Protection Member accept ALL actions performed by you and those under your command as your OWN responsibility? Yes, I do.

5. Will you remain loyal and faithful to the Universal Union as long as you live? Yes, I will.

6. Why do you want to join the Combine Civil Authority? The Civil Protection is the future and the future will live.





Please sign the attached oath using only blue or black pen.

I, Siera Ponikvar hereby swear my mind, body and soul to the Universal Union forever so long as I draw breath. I do so knowing that my actions will be held accountable to me and solely myself. I also declare my knowledge that as a Member of The Universal Union that I will be required to perform tasks above and beyond as well as perform ANY task ordered to by ANY commanding person(s). I hereby acknowledge the fact that as a Civil Protection Task-force Unit that I will be losing most, if not all, communication and or past relationship with anyone outside of the Universal Union's operational bounds.
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Offline SkeptiK

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Re: My CCA app, Tell me how i did.
« Reply #1 on: August 22, 2011, 05:47:51 AM »
I only read the back story, but what I had noticed is that your story seemed slapped together in manner of speaking. However it was a good read, some of it was questioning but there was only one main problem being your chars name is Siera, simmilar to Sierra the creators of HL.
Burning Bullet: you're stupid
Burning Bullet: i was in cg
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