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Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« on: February 22, 2012, 07:11:04 PM »
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Steam Name: STALKER
Age: 16
How long have you been Roleplaying? (can be any game): Since Fallout 3 (2008) (4 Years)
How long have you been playing Serious GMod RP?: 3.5 years

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Authorization(s):
The ability to make prosthethic arms or legs
The ability to fight others with brawling moves (throw over shoulder, etc)
Technician skills
Jalopy (admin spawnage only) (Denied)
Raincoats (Outcasts or words that people want sewn on back)
Russian vocoder added to gasmask/facemask with Russian language since the Outlands take place in Asia. Manual included with translations. (lol google translation ftw IC'ly copy and paste.)
Russian mask (almost like the design of the welding facemask but abit different)
Russian engineering uniform from Spetsnaz.

Name: Jake Kingstone
Age: 26
Gender: Male
Affiliation: None

Write a detailed in-canon back-story how your character obtained these authorizations.
 Jake Kingstone was great in engineering in the so called West London. Along with his buddies, they shared beers and such together in different occasions, especially if they hanged out with eachother or it's just lunchtime. "12:00, who's up for a beer?," they always repeated that line over and over, whether or not it's just a pain in the ass to say. Jake Kingstone always hanged out with his father for the learning of Engineering and Technician skills. Grab a seat as I said before and listen carefully.

 Jake Kingstone was raised and born in West London, just like his family members and buddies. He was quite the explorer and learner, especially at a low age in his childhood. His father continued to learn him how to read books on Engineering, Science and many others aswell. The parts that he had in his garage that was needed for a vehicle or machine. His father even fixed his bike for him whenever it got broken. Now he is in his adolescence age and continues to strive the learning experience.

 "Aha! You won!" yelled out Jake as he threw his 100 dollars in the center of the table. "Aaaahhhh, shit man. You lucky bastard," he laughed along with his buddies. Michael put his hands over the money and put it near his chest, shoving it inside his backpack. "Only a few bucks but it's good for paying my bills. Aha!" he laughed as his buddies did too. As the laughter died down, the conversation went on and on about their lifetime. "So, about Samantha? Tell us about her." "Well, her name is Samantha Newmann. Quite the great girlfriend. She is uhhhh... a engineer like me and well, we got married three weeks ago." "Really man? Why didn't you tell us?" "Heh, you were there crazy." "O-ho shit, I was there. My mind is spinnin' right now. Sorry." Jake Kingstone leaned back in the seat and took a long swig as the conversation went on around the table.

 A ace up your sleeve isn't gonna work, he thought. You can't play the tricks on the Overwatch nor Civil Protection, this doesn't apply to a gang of strangers sealing a can of poor whoop ass on you too. The buddies were just leaving until a muscle car drifted infront of them, the tension rised and the talk started to die down. A gang of bikers came from the car with baseball bats and shanks and looked at them. The breeze whistled until one of them yelled "Gimme yer' fuckin' money buddy." Jake responded "Heh. It's in my ass, come and get it!" The man approached him angrily and threw a fist to his face, Jake grabbed his wrist along with a taunt. "Too fast for you," Jake turned around and threw him over his shoulder, body slamming the stranger. His friend came by and started to beat him about using his boot and fist.

 All hell broke loose. One stranger took out a M9 and fired eight rounds into his buddy, knocking him down to his fatal death. Jake sprinted towards him in a fury and threw a punch to his cheek hard, knocking some of his teeth out along with blood, then threw another hook across his temple and bounced him to the side like a ping-pong ball. The man tried to get the M9 until a boot struck the weapon. "Not so fast," Jake said as he grabbed the M9. He kicked the man across the face and whipped him to his side, he tried crawling away but... a voice came from behind. "Being killed by your own weapon? Heh." Rounds flied into the man as Jake began squeezing the trigger, the continuous bloodshed went over his urban clothing.

 Looking to his side, the gang were beaten by his friends. Sadly, one friend died in this incident and the funeral was planned for tommorow. He didn't bother to go and yet he stayed in his garage, reading a book about technician and engineering all in one.

 Sitting on the wooden chair, the birds were chirping and the wind whistled. Some cards flew off the table as he locked his eyes onto it. He remembered his buddies, sitting on the chairs along with him.

 A month ago, Jake thought of a great plan in order to be spotted attention to the Outlands. Using black raincoats with two armbands and 'Outcasts' sewn on the back will be given out to his members. But, where can I find these raincoats? He thought. Well, back in City45. Suitcases were filled with these so called "Citizen kits" which have clothing and extra bonuses for a citizen. Raincoats are also in there just incase the weather changes. After scavenging around most of the time for suitcases, he has found a ton of suitcases in which means that he has found a ton of raincoats. It all depends on luck, whether or not you can find some. Rarely, some people even gave him their own raincoats. He then sewn 'Outcasts' on the back and sewn the two armbands on each upper sleeve of the arms. It looked great so he kept doing the same to the other raincoats aswell.

 Back two months ago, Jake was scavenging for metal parts, engines, four rubber tires and many more. These were found on abandoned vehicles, warehouses, houses and many more left around the forest and such. The engine was the most hardest part to find but he finally found it in another broken down Jalopy, which was left by it's owner waiting for him in the darkened tunnels. He took a few parts for it and arrived back to the garage. He started to weld this and that together, then used a few tools to bolt and screw together different parts once again. The Jalopy didn't work whenever he put the keys into the ignition. The engine busted about as sparks flinged everywhere, Jake watched in boredom after all the work he had put into it. "Fucksakes," he threw the wrench on the ground and walked out for the day.

 He was invited by his friend a few hours later. He was a scientist and told him all about a vocoder that was left in a warehouse nearby. It was a strange looking square with a black coat around it. There was a wire connected to it along with a rechargable module that can be operated by hand. He tested it out and began to speak english through the vocoder. Jake said "Bastard" through it, which came out as "???????". The scientist gave him a large manual which was filled with words that can be spoken through, there was also a few blank pages which were kept for notes.

 Time passed. He was working on his prosthethic limbs for multiple inhabitants who wanted a order for such a limb. He took out his papers and stared at the words in proper ink. It all talked about specific limbs people wanted, ranging from arms to legs and even small parts for missing bones. He wrote down on the paper "Nick and Beans; Arms and Legs needed." He nodded and crumpled the paper inside his pocket before putting on his matted hand gloves and he got to work. He started to read a book all about Technicianal acknowledgement on how to put this and that together and even a few hints, some were useful to him also. He started to gain the knowledgement as he smiled, noticing the power supply on the arm started to work, he slowly put down his welder's facemask and began welding more.

 The next day, Jake Kingstone was scavenging, adjusting the strap around his chest. He then encountered a person who had angression in his eyes. "Hey, what's up with you?" "You!" "What?" Jake responded audibly, "What about me?" "You are a fuckin' traitor!" "No I am not." "Yes you are, Jakey boy." Jake threw a fist to the man's face but got caught in his grasp, beginning to stare into his eyes. He threw his other fist and yet it had the same catch. Jake knee'd him across the gut and stunned him for a short time, then hit him across the temple three times, then a hard elbow to the back. He coughed in pain on the ground, Jake leaned back and then threw a soccer kick to his nose, cracking it into two. The man flew over and fell on his back, unconsious.

 Due to his strength and knowledge altogether from encountering specific fights, Jake will be much better in fighting with his brawl movements. This will also bring out the ability to carry more equipment which will loosen up the overcumbering.

 On that day, he also found a military facemask half buried in the ground. The visor was abit cracked but atleast it could absorb a small caliber round. The metal plating surrounding the mask was pretty good, a few dents were left inside some of the platements, even a few scratches were left inside the mask which were golden-like scratches. The golden scratches and black painting made the mask a great artifact and head protectant. There was also a black facemask made from thick cotton with a mouth and eye socket opening just for the extra design along with woodland uniform with a strange, looking armband. A backpack hanged from the back with some engineers googles and a few extra spare filters. A gasmask also hanged from the backpack. A leg strap was also seen hanging from the upper sleeve of the leg which could hold handguns. Jake grabbed ahold of the uniform, facemask, backpack and the other equipment then shoved it inside his backpack for later.

 What will these authorizations give your character in regards to perks or defects?
Perks
The ability to transport members and inhabitants to different locations.
New technician skills for Jake, this helps him make Prosthethic arms and other technician goods..
Prosthethic arms for the disabled inhabitants of Outlands (e.g. Beans and Nick)
New raincoats for Outcast members and other members, which can be spotted by other people.
Disguise! (vocoder and raincoat)
Facemask will deliver much more protection to the user.
Engineering uniform just for the design.

Defects
Much larger target.
Car needs maintenance, especially with gas filling and such. (Denied)
Raincoats will be damaged overtime.
// Admins have to spawn Jalopy. (Denied)
Suspicious with disguising around others.
Facemask and uniform will deteorite overtime from damage.


What do you plan to do with these perks/defects?
 I will plan to make Passive and Action RP with the perks and defects altogether. Along with the passing of new raincoats for members of the Outcasts or specific people who ask. Artifical limbs will help the people of the Outlands also to replace a torn off limb.

Will anyone else need these auths? (If so, list OOC and IC name(s))
Raincoats for people who ask IC'ly.

Which server does this apply for?
Outlands

Extra Notes (optional):
 I know this authorization has a ton of auth's just for one thread. I thought compiling it into one wouldn't make a huge argument since I have to build more authorizations.
« Last Edit: March 03, 2012, 09:16:57 PM by The Mysterious Stranger »

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #1 on: February 22, 2012, 08:31:44 PM »
This seems under written to me. Could you expand on the specifics of each perk? In addition, flags cannot be applied for- but if this is accepted, the mask could be /physdesc'd. Also,on the note of the gas mask, filters run out and do not last forever, remember that while expanding.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #2 on: February 22, 2012, 10:12:10 PM »
I know, I had quite the rush. I will modify the storyline construction soon. Also, gasmask filters are put onto the gasmask itself at certain times such as blocking gas particles (mustard gas, smoke, etc.), chemical resistance, radioactive particles or dust reaching the lungs, etcetera etcetera.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #3 on: February 22, 2012, 10:29:49 PM »
I know, I had quite the rush. I will modify the storyline construction soon. Also, gasmask filters are put onto the gasmask itself at certain times such as blocking gas particles (mustard gas, smoke, etc.), chemical resistance, radioactive particles or dust reaching the lungs, etcetera etcetera.

Alright, no problem. Also, I know about the filter thing, which was my point that the unit's mask most likey din't have a filter in it, as it would of been wasting it.

UU.OTA-VANGUARD.6.94250 | Online (THETA.EOW)
C45.CCA.CLASSIFIED.326 | In Service (VOID-DvL.326)
C45.CCA.APEX-01.199 | In Service
Dr. Wolfgang Metzger | Dead | Shot after throwing a Breen bust at the SeC.


9:19 PM - Brandon: I'll donate more later, It's just my mother is a dumb face
9:19 PM - RoflWaffle - fuck off please: i'm an idiot for assuming things her


9:22 PM - Lord Bravery: Brandon
9:22 PM - Lord Bravery: have sex with m

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #4 on: February 23, 2012, 10:06:09 PM »
 I have to head to bed right now. Since I cannot do this at the moment, all my break time after school has been used up for socialising in real life. You know what I mean, a lot of doing this and that. This will be done tommorow.

 UPDATE 1: Has been completed along with a new construction of the short storyline. Added new auth's for the brawl moves. All auth's are put into one storyline.
« Last Edit: February 24, 2012, 03:47:50 PM by The Mysterious Stranger »

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #5 on: February 25, 2012, 03:50:21 PM »
That is quite a lot of authorizations for such a small backstory. I may be wrong, but this doesn't look like that much effort. However, I have seen you roleplay ingame and you are a great roleplayer. I want to watch you a bit more before I support you or not.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #6 on: February 25, 2012, 03:56:27 PM »
 This is how it's suppose to be in my opinion. All those authorizations are packed all into one small backstory.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #7 on: February 25, 2012, 04:14:49 PM »
That is quite a lot of authorizations for such a small backstory. I may be wrong, but this doesn't look like that much effort. However, I have seen you roleplay ingame and you are a great roleplayer. I want to watch you a bit more before I support you or not.

I've got to agree with Yagrum, the detail is very light, and needs to be worked out.

Also,

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Authorization(s):
The ability to make prosthethic arms or legs
The ability to fight others with brawling moves (throw over shoulder, etc)
Technician skills
Jalopy (admin spawnage only)
Raincoats (Outcasts or words that people want sewn on back)
Combine vocoder added to gasmask (admins can depend if flags are needed for this or not.)

More information on the prosthetic limbs is required, there does not seem to be much detail to that subject yet.
The effectiveness of your "Brawling moves" is very dependent on your fitness level, which you have not detailed yet.
You should specify what "technician" skills you wish to possess. Technician's perform a myriad of different duties which would encompass certain skills.
Based on the over all application, and lack of any admins to supply information on your roleplaying skill, I am very iffy on the jalopy.
The discovery of the raincoats seems so very convenient- and that they would have the name of your resistance group on it? (If Outcasts is not you / a group, then ignore this portion of the comment)
Combine Vocoder / Gasmask is a no, you cannot apply for anything related to the CCA / Combine.

Also, just a general note- you seemed to make more of a list than a backstory. Instead of detailing your story, with the perks intermingled, it seems you've omitted times, dates, locations, and people.

UU.OTA-VANGUARD.6.94250 | Online (THETA.EOW)
C45.CCA.CLASSIFIED.326 | In Service (VOID-DvL.326)
C45.CCA.APEX-01.199 | In Service
Dr. Wolfgang Metzger | Dead | Shot after throwing a Breen bust at the SeC.


9:19 PM - Brandon: I'll donate more later, It's just my mother is a dumb face
9:19 PM - RoflWaffle - fuck off please: i'm an idiot for assuming things her


9:22 PM - Lord Bravery: Brandon
9:22 PM - Lord Bravery: have sex with m

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #8 on: February 25, 2012, 05:48:31 PM »
That is quite a lot of authorizations for such a small backstory. I may be wrong, but this doesn't look like that much effort. However, I have seen you roleplay ingame and you are a great roleplayer. I want to watch you a bit more before I support you or not.

I've got to agree with Yagrum, the detail is very light, and needs to be worked out.

Also,

Quote
Authorization(s):
The ability to make prosthethic arms or legs
The ability to fight others with brawling moves (throw over shoulder, etc)
Technician skills
Jalopy (admin spawnage only)
Raincoats (Outcasts or words that people want sewn on back)
Combine vocoder added to gasmask (admins can depend if flags are needed for this or not.)

More information on the prosthetic limbs is required, there does not seem to be much detail to that subject yet.
The effectiveness of your "Brawling moves" is very dependent on your fitness level, which you have not detailed yet.
You should specify what "technician" skills you wish to possess. Technician's perform a myriad of different duties which would encompass certain skills.
Based on the over all application, and lack of any admins to supply information on your roleplaying skill, I am very iffy on the jalopy.
The discovery of the raincoats seems so very convenient- and that they would have the name of your resistance group on it? (If Outcasts is not you / a group, then ignore this portion of the comment)
Combine Vocoder / Gasmask is a no, you cannot apply for anything related to the CCA / Combine.

Also, just a general note- you seemed to make more of a list than a backstory. Instead of detailing your story, with the perks intermingled, it seems you've omitted times, dates, locations, and people.

 You've hit the nail on the head. I make authorizations with times, dates, locations and people. Also, I will update this authorization with seperate sections for each authorization said later on.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #9 on: February 26, 2012, 11:38:28 AM »
The Jalopy (Vehicle) and the combine vocoder is denied, because they're both apart of the not allowed list on auth apps.

Vehicles & Anything related to the CCA/Combine

The rest of your auths are possible, however each of them aren't covered in enough detail in your back story. Apart from the technician skills, which are fairly common in London.

So then, the verdict so far:

The ability to make prosthethic arms or legs - Needs more detail in back story
The ability to fight others with brawling moves - needs more  detail in  back story
Technician skills - Accepted
Jalopy (admin spawnage only) - Denied
Raincoats - Needs more detail in back story (How you got ahold of the amount of raincoats and sewing material for them all)
Combine vocoder added to gasmask - Denied


You have one week, (March the 4th) (04/03/2012) to update your backstory for the other auths, before they will be automatically denied on account of lack of detail in back story


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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #10 on: February 26, 2012, 01:05:02 PM »
 Don't lock this application yet. Still needs a few tweaking to it and such once I get my time on it.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #11 on: February 26, 2012, 02:10:49 PM »
I wont lock it any time soon mate, you have a whole week :)


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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #12 on: February 26, 2012, 03:17:16 PM »
I wont lock it any time soon mate, you have a whole week :)

 Appreciated, I'll tell you when the storyline construction and such are complete.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #13 on: March 03, 2012, 10:07:07 PM »
I think I am done now. Added a few this and that.

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Re: Jake Kingstone's Authorization Application
« Reply #14 on: March 03, 2012, 11:51:32 PM »
I know nothing I say has much impact, but I'm gonna add my two cents for the heck of it. I thought I'd point out that your back-story demonstrates your character using his skill set, but doesn't really illustrate how you came to get said skills. I don't want to sound like I'm not in favor of the auths, but maybe just amend your back-story a tad bit
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