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[DENIED] Cindy Whitmore's Civil Authority Application
« on: August 08, 2012, 05:44:51 AM »
Cindy Whitmore's Civil Authority Application

OOC Name: Just a Panda

IC Character Name: Cindy Whitmore

1) Please write a minimum of 3 paragraphs OOC'ly detailing why your character wishes to join the Combine Civil Authority and what lead your character to do so.
Cindy was just like the normal City 45 citizen. She would wake up, (Most of the time she would not sleep from raids, lock-downs, ect.) eat a leftover ration, sit outside and watch life go past. Basically the lather, rinse, repeat routine. After she had seen the raids, lock-downs, fights, and sometimes killing for a few weeks she was a spectator of the events. This did not bother her for a short time. After a short time  it climaxed and it began to annoy her.

 After a while it got tiring, she began to watch out her apartment window at the raiding, fighting, and shooting. She got tired of it, she didn't have much heart for some of the CP's but she had to deal with it. As long as she was alive she had to take the 'Civil Protection' for granite. As long as the Civil Protection kept her alive. Though it still annoyed her, it annoyed her deeply. The searing annoyance had gotten to Cindy and she had fell prey to the Combine.

 One day she was walking into a shop and tripped a rebel that was running out of the store. The CP got there in time to get the rebel or as they called them anti-citizens on the ground. The officer granted her a point. Cindy was questionable and she asked what these points do. He explained it to her and she started off to get 4 more of these points. She eventually got 4 more points and she thought back on if she should become apart of the Civil Protection or not. She was only told the good part about being a CP so without thinking twice about the consequences she started off to make an application to join the CCA. She got some facts on the Combine and the Combine history in hope to be accepted.


2) Please detail your characters traits. (Eg, Pure, Lawful, Trustworthy)
Pure- She will always follow orders and make sure they are carried out.

Cooperative- She will successfully work with any teammate without complaining.

Trustworthy- She is to sure carry out orders and make sure they are done correct.

Brave- She will push her fears away from a fight till she is successful.

Lawful- She will always make sure she does her job but also follow the rules.

Polite- She will respect her higher command.

Obedient- She will follow the rules and listen to objectives without complaining.

3) Please provide 2 paragraphs about what you are expecting the Combine Civil Authority to be like for you and your character.
I expect the CCA to be a fun/scary role in Role Playing. I expect it to be hard (That's because I lag sometimes) and a adventerous experience. I expect it to be exciting, it will definitely be a memorial achievements in Role Playing. I also expect the CCA training a lot different from regular citizen activities.

 For Cindy she expects the CCA to be fun and beneficial. But what she hasn't realized is that it will be hard for her. All the way from training to her ending she will have to endure hard assignments. The CCA wont be as easy as a cake walk for her. The only thing she expects hard is patrolling and multitasking, also raids.

4) Please provide a detailed back-story from an out-of-character perspective on your applying character. This section must be detailed and consist of a minimum of 300 words.
                                                                          -CHILDHOOD-
 Cindy Whitmore was 5 when she got into kindergarten, she was so smart they made Cindy skip to kindergarten. Cindy was fascinated with books and machinery. She had read 4 learn-to-read book by herself when she was 2. By the time Cindy was 4 she had a huge vocabulary and vast knowledge about machinery and nature. Cindy was a very smart kid. Her parents were constantly bragging about Cindy and her smarts. About the age 11 she was in middle school and was repeatedly getting A+'s on each report card. When she turned 13 her mother had died from brain tumor, medulloblastoma.
   
                                                                            -TEENAGE'HOOD'-
 By the time Cindy was 16 and she was still very smart but also she was stronger and braver. Her first fight was when she was 17, she was walking through the outside basketball court and bumped into another girl. The girl fell and went ballistic on one little scratch. As the two teens fought the loud heel clamps came around the corner, both battle-worn teens had encountered the principal in front of them. For the first time Cindy had brought shame upon the family. Cindy was suspended, each day Cindy was suspension went by, Cindy would sneak out of her room and talk to her friends through the gate surrounding the 'court' yard. The fight was brutal so only a mere couple of cameras were placed around the school. Her dad got really mad when he found out about her sneaking out and put a taking device on her back. He also set it to were if she got to far from him it would shack her. Cindy was in deep trouble, her grades had also fallen to a B-.


                                                                           -ADULT'HOOD'-
 Cindy Whitmore was now 21, as time went on Cindy was knocked out with a piece of rubble beside her head. There was a portal storm, Cindy was looking up at a lamp and the lamp had fallen from the portal storm. Cindy had fallen over from the huge push on her body. The whole building shook with it, but since she was in searing pain she thought it was a mortar. Cindy was scared, she heard rebels and anti citizens fighting a war out there. A clock was still intact, she looked at it and it had been 3 hours since this war had started. She looked outside the window and she saw shooting happening all over the place. All of a sudden the building had collapsed. Cindy ran out and fell from another push on her body. She was trying to get up and a rebel had pushed her down, she collapsed and as she was blacking out another lighter portal storm came and had no big effect, she saw it but didn't remember it. There was a cut/lump on her head. As the 7 Hour War raged on Cindy was out cold. It was a long time before she woke up. She was surrounded by masked men named Civil Protection, they gave her a blue jumpsuit, a CID number, and an escort to a train. As she was being transported to City 45 she wondered what it looked like and how long was she out. She got off the train and headed to get a ration after they were greeted by a man on the Nexus screen. She looked around, scanners were floating and Combine were holding stun-sticks. Cindy was probably the utmost confused/scared person there.

                                                                             -7 HOUR WAR-
 Cindy was running down a hallway confused, she was escaping a falling building. She was running out until she had tripped. She couldn't get up because there were so many people running over her. As she was getting up a piece of rubble had hit her head and she got knocked out. She woke up and heard gun shots and screams. She looked down and she noticed she was being dragged away. Her head was bleeding, but it wasn't severe. She looked up and saw that a masked man was dragging her. She looked down and blacked out. She woke up on a bed and was surrounded by other masked men. They had stitched the wound on her head. Then they knocked her back out with some medication and transported her back to the 'rally point'.

 
                                                                             -PRESENT-
 Cindy Whitmore arrived at City 45. She walked past the masked men watching her. She quickly got out, got an apartment, and pieced back her thoughts one by one. As she finished a broadcast came on with a lady's voice that announced rations. Cindy got her rations and when everyone was in front of the Nexus, a huge building that was made by  the combine, the black screen on the nexus had shown a man. The man had greeted everyone. Once it was over everyone went on with their normal lives. The robot looking masked men searched some people for reasons Cindy couldn't understand and some were taken into the Nexus. After a while Cindy slept, woke up, and repeated the same routine. Cindy always saw/heard someone getting detained or killed.


5) Have you ever had a CCA character here at Catalyst Gaming?  If so, explain why it was removed.
No, I have not.


OOC Details

1. How long have you played on role-playing servers in general?
About 2 to 4 years so I'd say 3

2. How long have you played on serious servers?
About 2 years.

3. How long have you played on Catalyst Gaming?
2 years

4. What Time zone are you in?
U.S. Central Time Zone

5. In what country do you live?
United States

6. How old are you?
11

7. What�s your most memorable quality RP experience?
I remember playing Outlands and I spotted a scanner so we kept shoot/throwing rocks at it till it went down, then we took it apart and made a computer out of it. Well I did.

8. Do you consider yourself a good listener?
Yes, I do.



IC Section

Full Name: Cindy Whitmore
CID: 34700
Age: 22
Gender: Female
Height: 6'2
Hair Colour Brown
Eye Colour: Blue
Sexual Orientation: Straight
Weight: 135
Mental Distinctions: Quick strategizing, remains calm.
Mental Defects: None.
Mental Advantages: Thinks quickly.
Notable Qualities: Intelligent.


1. Have you ever been detained or apprehended for a Sociostability Infringement before? If so, explain?
Yes, once, because I found an empty ammo box and was questioned about it.

2. Do you regularly eat Combine Civil Authority Issued Rations?
Yes, I do eat the supplied water and food from the CCA.

3. Are you willing to give your life to the cause of the Universal Union?
Yes, I am willing to risk/give my life to the Universal Union

4. Do you as a Citizen and future Civil Protection Member accept ALL actions performed by you and those under your command as your OWN responsibility?
Yes, I do accept that all actions preformed by me are under my responsibility.

5. Will you remain loyal and faithful to the Universal Union as long as you live?
Yes, I will always remain loyal to the Universal Union.

6. Why do you want to join the Combine Civil Authority?
I, Cindy Whitmore wish to join the CCA to help ensure safety among the loyaltist and citizens. I also wish to serve and protect the Universal Union.


Please sign the attached oath using only blue or black pen.

I, Cindy Whitmore hereby swear my mind, body and soul to the Universal Union forever so long as I draw breath. I do so knowing that my actions will be held accountable to me and solely myself. I also declare my knowledge that as a Member of The Universal Union that I will be required to perform tasks above and beyond as well as perform ANY task ordered to by ANY commanding person(s). I hereby acknowledge the fact that as a Civil Protection Task-force Unit that I will be losing most, if not all, communication and or past relationship with anyone outside of the Universal Union's operational bounds.

Post Auto-Merged: August 07, 2012, 10:45:38 PM
I was told that I can change the tiny things and grammar/spelling mistakes.
« Last Edit: August 08, 2012, 12:48:17 PM by RTLK ?HellWeek2k12 »

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Re: Cindy Whitmore's Civil Authority Application
« Reply #1 on: August 08, 2012, 05:54:12 AM »
I'm not sure you're ready for the cca or that I would trust you with a gun considering your massive rdm on hrp.

If I was reviewing this I'd deny it, but as I just officially began my loa imma leave that call for the ultimate reviewer.

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Re: Cindy Whitmore\\\'s Civil Authority Application
« Reply #2 on: August 08, 2012, 06:54:26 AM »
Oh shit, things just got real, now I really need my serious face! I'm serious, well, at least hear me out. I know I have done some bad things in the past that have gotten me major consequences. I understand what I have done and I accept my judgement if I am denied. But I have changed myself. You may still not accept me, but even though I am 11 years old I am going through a lot of trial and error. I have made bad  decisions that I can still fix. Some things are and are not meant to happen and I understand why you would deny me. But I can trust myself, I have changed ever since my mass RDM. I know why I will be denied and I accept my faith. You might be thinking why am I on CG? Because god has granted me the technolgy and smarts, if you don't like me on CG then so be it, but you can't stop me from playing games and having fun. I understand the consequences for my actions that I have made on CG and I am truthfully sorry for everything. You may have not noticed it but I have changed and I don't RDM with a gun on sight anymore. I have gotten better in RP. You may think good about yourself but don't say you haven't had trial and error.

Post Auto-Merged: August 08, 2012, 06:56:10 AM
Also I have spent a lot of time into this reviewing it and all. Still I accept my faith if I am denied.
« Last Edit: August 08, 2012, 06:56:10 AM by Just a Panda »

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Re: Cindy Whitmore\'s Civil Authority Application
« Reply #3 on: August 08, 2012, 08:40:21 AM »
Fact that you've been permanently banned from any Catalyst-Gaming.net server rapidly lowers your chance of getting this application accepted. Maybe you've put much effort into this application, but you could have and will have to try harder. You say that you've reviewed this application several times, though your application has multiple spelling errors, such as they'er or coulde'nt. Same with improper capitalization of some names - nexus and combine. Your backstory doesn't basically say anything about the Seven Hour War and doesn't prove the knowledge of HL2 cannon, which you hopefully have.
You need to develop your application into way better version, if you want it accepted with your HRP permanent ban.
I recommend you (not ordering you) to put yourself harder requirements - like twice the original one. Instead of making three paragraphs of four sentences each, make three of eight sentences each. That may raise your acceptance chances.
Fact that you claim that you've made computer out of synthetic scanner isn't any interesting as well, and if it has been on CG, you miss authorization application for it.

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Re: Cindy Whitmore\\\'s Civil Authority Application
« Reply #4 on: August 08, 2012, 08:53:32 AM »
Fact that you've been permanently banned from any Catalyst-Gaming.net server rapidly lowers your chance of getting this application accepted. Maybe you've put much effort into this application, but you could have and will have to try harder. You say that you've reviewed this application several times, though your application has multiple spelling errors, such as they'er or coulde'nt. Same with improper capitalization of some names - nexus and combine. Your backstory doesn't basically say anything about the Seven Hour War and doesn't prove the knowledge of HL2 cannon, which you hopefully have.
You need to develop your application into way better version, if you want it accepted with your HRP permanent ban.
I recommend you (not ordering you) to put yourself harder requirements - like twice the original one. Instead of making three paragraphs of four sentences each, make three of eight sentences each. That may raise your acceptance chances.
Fact that you claim that you've made computer out of synthetic scanner isn't any interesting as well, and if it has been on CG, you miss authorization application for it.
I have fixed the grammar/spelling mistakes.

Post Auto-Merged: August 08, 2012, 09:35:24 AM
I have also re-done/fixed/added parts to the application.
« Last Edit: August 08, 2012, 09:35:24 AM by Just a Panda »

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Re: Cindy Whitmore's Civil Authority Application
« Reply #5 on: August 08, 2012, 12:47:30 PM »
Actually you know what.

Denied.

Don't be a smartass when replying to a valid concern.

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