Dr. William Coomer's Journal (Black Mesa) Chapter One

[Labyrinth]

Please give me suggestions, positive replies, and how I can make this series better, thanks! 

<a href="https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5hD3ych2nG4" target="_blank">https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5hD3ych2nG4</a>

[Delta1116732]

Pros

+ Haven't seen many people who have done this rare. (Black mesa stories)
+ Story over all looks good.

Cons

- Mostly screenshots. Doesn't keep the viewer entertained.
- Not a lot of the actual story.

Conclusion- I think it was quite good over all. You have the basics it's just for preparation could be done a bit more. I'd suggest running videos instead of screenshots, and maybe instead of writing you voice over laying the video. This would keep viewers entertained. If you could add more dialogue, and also...keep in mind that the "Black Mesa Source" should be out soon. So you could always prepare for the time being until it's released. Black Mesa source will be well known on release as well with videos.

[Labyrinth]

Pros

+ Haven't seen many people who have done this rare. (Black mesa stories)
+ Story over all looks good.

Cons

- Mostly screenshots. Doesn't keep the viewer entertained.
- Not a lot of the actual story.

Conclusion- I think it was quite good over all. You have the basics it's just for preparation could be done a bit more. I'd suggest running videos instead of screenshots, and maybe instead of writing you voice over laying the video. This would keep viewers entertained. If you could add more dialogue, and also...keep in mind that the "Black Mesa Source" should be out soon. So you could always prepare for the time being until it's released. Black Mesa source will be well known on release as well with videos.

Thank you very much, I'll begin voice acting, and I'll work on the putting videos in.

[crazily farting teacher]

This is not that bad besides the fact you did it with windows movie maker. I kinda gave up on the OCRP trailer.